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    dots Submission Name: Write !dots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 332
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWrite !dots

    Write !

    Some madness banter of insanity
    is pulling at my thoughts
    spilling effulgent
    in giant verbs and huge marching nouns
    collecting snippets as it walks
    stomping on flowers
    and mushing liquid the paints of images
    swirls captivated
    with great toed boots

    I can hear it coming
    a hefty heavy steady stamp
    and I am almost afraid that it might rack me
    hit me hard
    and demand some elucidated expression from me
    I would shudder
    but excitement won't let me

    Instead it sets me to a creaking ball points
    and tiny alphabets that strain my eyes
    while spelling out its diffident request

    Write it says

    Write, while some half cold sickness griped my stomach
    and I wretch on grammar
    and thus the great feathers quill
    dips in the ink of my soul
    and so ineptly scribbles epilepsy
    explanation, image, wordage, spillage of sensory lobotomy
    partridge in a god-damn pear tree

    Curl about my finger
    and reek havoc through those dictionary brain cells
    yer! smash them brain cells
    mush, mash and squeeze the last drip
    find expression in the gooey lumps that are left

    WRITE ! god dam it !
    Be succinct, be poetic
    surpassing idiom and useless language
    for Christ sake just WRITE it !

    Pilloried on my own sheets of paper
    by my own pen
    because it never catches enough
    as it twist this origami of words
    i-n-t-o s-o-m-e-t-h-i-n-g
    I want to express
    I need
    I want
    To etch with you
    A moment of perfection

    I need your voices
    I need to hear you sing my poets
    I need these scratching and scathing claws
    and I need your delicate dance
    I need something to end this misery
    and I need this piquant
    this ever enlightened soul search of words
    to wrap up this bundle of love

    And toss me nonchalant into eternity

    Lest some madness of bantered insanity

    Takes hold of me

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