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    dots Submission Name: The Pain I havedots

    Author: wolfgurl830
    ASL Info:    18/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    0.96 - 42/38/34
    Words: 330
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
    Total Views: 774
    Average Vote:    2.5000
    Bytes: 1936


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    dotsThe Pain I havedots

    My lifeÖ.Alone

    The days I have lived
    The happy the sad.
    I only have one thing left
    I'm not sure if I want to be alive
    For my last to be a sigh
    No one comforts me
    So I have no love
    But I have no hate
    It may be too late
    To be happy again
    Anger, Sadness and Depression
    Tears flow from my eyes
    Nothing in my life is ever fine
    I may seem happy
    But Iím just very hyper
    I love one person
    Who is no longer here
    So to die there is no fear
    I see ugly in my eyes
    For there is no beauty in my eyes
    I'm going to die alone
    The last thing I might see is blood
    And tears that flood

    I want to be free

    My family kills me
    I am not free
    Who could be so cruel?
    To give me no life
    The cuts they have caused me
    The sadness that I have
    The scars on me
    My friends are there
    But I canít see them often
    This causes tears
    I am free at school
    This causes me to be more childish there
    Cause at home I cant be one
    I will leave home without a trace
    So I can have a life
    They wonít know anything about me
    I just want to be free
    They wonít know
    Because I was never free

    My Secret

    I have a secret
    Only few know
    I canít put it out
    The way people would look at me
    The friends who will never see me the same
    People will think I'm insane
    I will be uglier
    Only people who are the same will understand
    I will be like a rabid rat
    That needs to be gotten rid of fast
    The little happiness will be gone
    I have a secrete that few know
    That I will keep mostly to myself
    So I donít have to be alone

    Submitted on 2009-03-24 16:22:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very long , innovating , detail with character, emotional output, good poem
    | Posted on 2009-03-25 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]

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