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    dots Submission Name: IN YOUR WAKEdots

    Author: SonOfDamascus
    ASL Info:    18/m/Maine
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 27/35/37
    Words: 265
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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       Think Metal Song.

    No Real Inspiration.
    i was just thinking of some things.
    and it put me in a brutal mood.

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    dotsIN YOUR WAKEdots

    Wherever you go/Destruction follows/You Breed Sorrows/To follow in your wake/Is to walk on nothing/Youíve destroyed it/All of this/All there was.

    I feel the devastation/That lays in your wake/A tear in the world/The one I made for me/And for you too.

    It has been seven long years/and still your terror reigns/I pick up what remains/and it crumbles to dust/burnt, scarred by what you did/and what you said.

    You should see it/everything youíve done/to not just me/but all Iíve hurt too/you want to rebuild what you broke/but its all so fucked now/why would you even bother.

    I feel the devastation/That lays in your wake/A tear in the world/The one I made for me/And for you too.

    Fuck what youíve done/and you too/I want nothing to do with you/youíre a bad omen/a dark sigil in the sky/an evil brand/so take this recovery and shove it/for now Iíll just pick through the rubble.

    I feel the devastation/That lays in your wake/A tear in the world/The one I made for me/And for you too.

    One more time I tell you/just a little push/and Iíll lay you down in my wake/this path of destruction/I will leave you in the dust youíve left me in so long/choke on the ashes bitch/as I burn your life away.

    Iíve had to climb my way out/and so will you/itís only fair that way/climb out of the hole Iíve dug for you/while I was waiting for you to come crawling back.

    I felt the devastation/That laid in your wake/now Iíll tear your world to pieces.

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