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    dots Submission Name: Into my blissdots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/160
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsInto my blissdots
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    I slipped into psychosis
    only to be terrified into the light.
    A shivering, dribbling wreck,
    (Blinded by the inner Sun)
    quivering in my boots.
    (I am grateful I have boots to quiver in, aren't you?
    Because what if I had no boots
    and no home to call mine.
    I would be shivering for different reasons
    none of them pleasant.
    What would I eat?
    How would I wash?
    Where would I pee?
    What if I had to worry about such things?)

    Flip the coin of lack
    and I find my head...nodding now
    Look at what I do have.
    I am grateful for the abundance in my life.
    Family. Friends. Food.
    I know how to value now.
    (Took me a spell in hell to tell).

    Thankyou for scaring me out of my wits
    and into my bliss, Lord.
    (Why, it was here all along!)




    Submitted on 2009-03-25 13:19:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wow thats pretty good!! You have a very good imagination, and powerful words. I felt like i was in the poem.
    | Posted on 2009-04-18 00:00:00 | by JonInk | [ Reply to This ]
      very strong words , a triumph on your poetry , your feelings are at best, keep writing , read my poem called " Comfort", tell me about it
    | Posted on 2009-03-30 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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