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    dots Submission Name: It All Ended With A Kissdots
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    Author: allmine
    ASL Info:    25/chick/your nightmares
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 33/69/45
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
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    dotsIt All Ended With A Kissdots
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    I can do nothing but sit and watch
    As my world falls apart
    As my heart is shattered
    As my life fades away
    You said you loved me
    And that you'd never leave
    You promised you'd never hurt me
    So all of this I'd belive
    I said "ignorance is bliss"
    As it ended with a kiss




    Submitted on 2009-03-25 17:47:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow! This poem was truly powerful. I loved the way you set off all of his promises to you within the context of an ugly breakup. It really highlights the way we can still cling to ideal wishes even when everything is going to [censored].
    | Posted on 2009-03-26 00:00:00 | by secretsuperstar | [ Reply to This ]


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