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    dots Submission Name: Secret of the Arid Sandsdots
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    Author: Sonson888
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    dotsSecret of the Arid Sandsdots
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    The Secret of those arid sands,
    Each grain of sand holds dear.
    A hidden Eden in itself,
    A consternating fear.

    And many fated sought this green
    Only to fall before,
    A parched breath far from drinking triumph,
    Oasis' portico.

    All Men, deceived by cruel Fate's eye!
    The Gold-around us-veiled.
    Man's destiny seeps through our hands;
    A resolution-failed.




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