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    dots Submission Name: Waiting for Youdots
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    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/153/74
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Description:
       How I feel about someone at the moment


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    dotsWaiting for Youdots
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    I look into those blue eyes
    And can't help but feel so sad
    Your the most addicting drug
    And my craving is bad

    But you don't notice me
    It's like I'm not there
    I could fall off this world tonite
    And you wouldn't give a care

    My mind floods with thoughts of you
    When I'm alone at night
    The thought of not having you
    Puts me in a terrible fright

    The wanting, the waiting
    Will it ever cease?
    From the day I met you
    You became my disease

    Now I wait patiently
    Hoping you'll see me as I am
    A caring women trying nothing more
    Then to care for a man...






    Submitted on 2009-03-25 23:45:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You didn't write this for me did you? lol no i'm just kidding oh it's been so long. I lke how raw you are no need for pretenses, you just expose yourself and hope your sinerety comes across (I do that but I find it very hard so sometimes I shy away) anyways nice write and I miss you terribly.

    Teardrops make the best ink,
    Jay.
    | Posted on 2009-08-08 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]


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