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    dots Submission Name: Last words from a exile kingdots
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    Author: JoJoCrab
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    dotsLast words from a exile kingdots
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    I hold my last breathe
    Sinking in sorrow
    Who would believe?
    I once held a nation
    Rejection from tribes
    In defense I stood
    No statue honoring my name
    Words pierce the deafen ears
    Jealousy rages a counsel
    Am I diminish by treachery
    A leader
    Conceal in a tomb




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