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The Sad Feelings of the Soul Unborn

Author: Sepheroth432
ASL Info:    24/Male/Michigan
Elite Ratio:    5.75 - 56 /45 /28
Words: 123
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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I write these piece as a tribute to my child who will never know love, never know joy, never know pain, and most of all never know me and my love cejai.

The Sad Feelings of the Soul Unborn

a love never to be told
a heart never to behold
no cries to lull
these are the sad feelings of the soul unborn

no running round
no playing on the ground
no bruises to kiss
these are the sad feeling of the soul unborn

No bed time stories
No getting them ready for school
no homework to look over and examine the doodles
these are the sad feelings of the soul unborn

No car to give
no parties to trow
no graduation to even go
these are the sad feelings of the soul unborn

No child of its own
no life to unfold
no love to find
these are the sad feeling of the soul unborn

Submitted on 2009-03-26 08:36:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  A beautiful piece. My heart aches for you, and those around you, but most especially for your baby.

Nitpicking, I would either switch the title to "Sadness of a Soul Unborn" or switch the words in the last line of each stanza to match the title now. Personally, I like the latter better, as it has better flow. The third line in the first stanza, 'lul' is spelled 'lull', and in the second line of the fourth stanza, 'trow' should be 'throw'

The last stanza is my favorite, as I have thought this myself, about my past and when others make that choice. You worded this beautifully, and it not only speaks but sings. You have grown as a writer already, I think. This is a wonderful way to remember what almost was, and something that you will never forget.

I hope that whereever your baby is, they have found peace, and will know the love you didn't get to show them.

Lady Rose
| Posted on 2009-03-26 00:00:00 | by Texan_Poet | [ Reply to This ]

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