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    dots Submission Name: Building Damdots

    Author: coloredstone
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 99/60/37
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       you know, we all face problems and challenges and have all these things to do in life...sometimes it seems we have more to do than the time we have, but one who gives up cannot win the game.

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    dotsBuilding Damdots

    Face to face with a flood;
    time flies by me, as if it never cared...
    And the flood keeps rushing on,
    wanting to be stopped.
    How long will I have to pile bricks
    to heighten the dam
    enough so that I may leave it and walk away?
    Bricks I keep piling, but not fast enough;
    and time will not stop for me.
    I am soaked, drenched, wet--
    but not miserable, no;
    A little sore, a little ache,
    A little thing not going as I tried,
    Won't make me fall, won't make me stop--
    Bricks I keep on piling, one after the other.
    Dreaming of a land which needs no dam
    no bricks, no pained arms.
    And dreams release a stream of determination
    rushing in me like a flood my own---
    Oh flood I face, you have found in me
    a soul refusing to be washed away.
    Let me take on what bricks need to be taken
    and get done the things that need to be done
    Before the land of my dreams.

    Submitted on 2009-03-27 08:00:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is really inspiring man, keep up the masonry.
    | Posted on 2009-06-03 00:00:00 | by geekyslacker | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. This is truly inspiring! I have not read anything like it, how wonderful. your words make me feel as if i am there or i am her who lifts each brick. I am her who seems to be so self motivated yet you are her and i am me standing and watching your work.
    I love the lines

    "Dreaming of a land which needs no dam
    no bricks, no pained arms."

    Many of us dream of a day to come when work is not for money yet sheer pleasure. Many of us ponder upon the day when we learn with no effort. Many of us pray to be taken care of, to be fed, and to be sheltered without a lift of a finger.
    But we are numb of the sweetness of our study, we are blind of the beauty of our work. If we took a moment to realize that, maybe we would enjoy.
    We are merely human, uncomfortable humans.

    "And dreams release a stream of determination
    rushing in me like a flood my own---"

    Determination. Sort of like adrenaline. I wish i was of.

    Fantastic work!
    | Posted on 2009-04-05 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]

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