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    dots Submission Name: "No more Innocence"dots
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    Author: SetmyselfonFire
    Elite Ratio:    2.83 - 41/55/47
    Words: 280
    Class/Type: Misc/Passion
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dots"No more Innocence"dots
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    You will never change your ways, you�re an artist kid
    And Im the same old girl, with a bottle of cheap gin
    And Im reminded of the pain that you placed in my heart
    When I see the record place, by the rhino store art
    Flashbacks, paybacks, backstabs, I�m fuckin up
    Drunk calls, your stares, Who cares we�re makin love

    Everything I learned from you, I take to my grave
    The way you never cared enough,
    And the pictures that you made.
    I will try to give my heart to him, but Ill keep you in mind
    The way you always come up,when you know I'm doing fine

    Laying in your bed I had my doubts,
    But I wouldn't change a thing at all
    Like walking out of your car that night..I knew you'd never call
    I took it in my own hands, made you think I'm over this
    Sometimes I lay up at night, I reminisce
    Thinking about the heartache, and how I love the way you kiss


    Even when you disappeared ,
    I'm never giving up on you,
    I'm not scared. I'm done with fear.
    So If I'm hurting feelings, I didn't mean to be rude
    They told me I was starting fires
    now that I'm with some other dude.
    But I'd trade this shit and never turn my head again
    They said that's messed up but I don't really give a fuck
    I'm trying to get involved , but now he's back, its just my luck
    Bullshit? you're full of every kind of taboo
    And It still hasn't scared me
    Ill take you anyway that I can have you




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