The Masked

Author: Aangskate ASL Info:    18/male Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 133 /117 /44 Words: 114

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The Masked

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If you were to open the lid, Or to pull off the plug, Would you run away because you were scared? Or would you just go along, But whisper and giggle when Im gone? Would all of my pain Show a heart of cold stone? Could you look past the stains, And see the girl hidden? She hides behind this mask of a smiling face, Trying not to let the darkness in. Her broken pieces lay scattered in this place. Can you see her pain? Can you feel the agony? Can you still love the girl who only wants to be accepted? For she will never change. Not ever.

Submitted on 2009-03-27 11:06:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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This reminds me of something I once wrote. That was long ago and the title of the poem and the specific words both escape me now, but I can remember writing something similar to this. This, unlike my poem I remember, reminds me off a small school girl that is thinking of her little friends. At the same time, though, I can see the more mature girl looking in the mirror and reflecting on a love, one that maybe is unrequited or one that is lost. This is the ultimate "stare in the mirror" kind of poem to me. The lines: "Would all of my pain Show a heart of cold stone? Could you look past the stains, And see the girl hidden?" show this perfectly to me. This is a perfect picture of self-reflection and wondering what others see in you. Do people see you as someone that is cold hearted? Or can they see that this is a mask you wear to protect yourself and ultimately protect them too? I see the problem of acceptance too. The ever prevolant problem amongst teenagers is the issue of being accepted, and you address that very well. Overall, while it lacks some of the imagery and overall emotion a lot of your poems have, this poem is pretty good. I enjoyed reading it, and you keep me interested in your work.

| Posted on 2009-09-14 00:00:00 | by FlickerofHope | [ Reply to This ]

This makes me think of a little girl who gets tormented or something. it is a very good write. A girl who is afraid to show her true self. i feel that way a lot actually. "She hides behind this mask of a smiling face, Trying not to let the darkness in. Her broken pieces lay scattered in this place." My favourite line. (: But as i read others comments, i see that it could be about you and your mom. Very goooddd. (:

| Posted on 2009-06-08 00:00:00 | by bloody_raven | [ Reply to This ]

Sorry for the short comment that lacked feeling, i had to get off quickly and only had time to say as much. The poem was interesting, not one of your best but still good.

| Posted on 2009-04-02 00:00:00 | by dthforeverpain8 | [ Reply to This ]

The words where confusing at the start, hard to find the true meaning, but as i went on, i was led more to believe it was between you and your mother, although i could not tell for certain. It was hard to sense the essence of poetry while determining meaning...

| Posted on 2009-04-02 00:00:00 | by dthforeverpain8 | [ Reply to This ]

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