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    dots Submission Name: show yourself to medots
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    Author: scardnscared
    ASL Info:    20
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 339/412/258
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 80
    Average Vote:    2.0000
    Bytes: 611



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    she watches him
    she still wants him
    she'd give up everything, just to understand him.
    she is me and i am her
    but all the words they are just a blur
    and how do I go back?
    Do you even know me?
    Can you just stand there and watch me
    as I dissolve?
    Try and be the savior
    I thought I needed myself to be
    well watch me as i walk away
    watch me as i say
    goodbye
    watch him as he falls apart
    looking at her back
    it comes apart, the heart he gave her
    it bleeds, it dies.
    it was all her fault.




    Submitted on 2009-03-27 13:18:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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