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    dots Submission Name: counting coup, the branding dots
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    Author: ruejacobs
    ASL Info:    39/feminazi/Gehenna
    Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 619/473/167
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotscounting coup, the branding dots
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    copyright by ruejacobs 3/27/2009 at 6 p.m.
    (for Obsidian)


    caviar on my tongue
    the liquid salt burst
    this membrane a memory
    i sliced it clean through
    i sliced through you
    that's one, dear
    watch your step

    a lichen armor on my skin
    as black as pitch
    see how it creeps
    and multiplies
    an abacus
    that's two, love
    take care

    the delicate elastic thread
    pulled taut and stretched
    until it snaps
    you saw the goddess naked, archer
    and that is three
    i'll make you dance




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      caviar on your tongue.

    you will be aware of the wisdom associated with eating what is good for you, when it is good for you. and too much salt will kill you like an overly well muscled right arm might...

    lichen armour (how wonderful)

    lichen thrives in good clean air: it is the oddest oldest rocksucker. to me for what it is worth, lichen takes me back to the far north of norway and the north west high bits of england, where there is stillness and clarity. and lichen is low range 3d marquetry that chronicles my life.

    anyway. you enumerate what has wound you round the axle and oddly enough (knot) it is done in a way that alternately delights and confuses the reader.

    this demographic clumsiness suits me entirely for i care little for the reader scratching his or her chin.

    keep on keeping on you strange creature.

    k
    | Posted on 2009-04-16 00:00:00 | by Awkward | [ Reply to This ]
      
    'Counting Coup in Indian wars would be when a warrior would hit his enemy with a stick. This would change the enemies energy, by just letting him know that you are not frightened and if you had really wanted to hurt him you could have. This act of physically touching your enemy without seriously hurting him can disarm the enemy. It creates an opportunity for the enemy to think about, and consider what he is doing and gives him a chance to remember that all life is sacred.'


    so,

    after that bombardment of well placed words,

    has the brave warrior added a few

    extra feathers

    to an already impressive headdress,

    or added a few more notches on the coup stick,

    or both?

    it is a real treat to return here.

    (and, before i forget to mention it,

    it was very kind of you to leave us the

    photographic clues.)


    scoring points in a war of words

    requires bravado. it is not for the meek.

    its a bit like dealing with naughty children. 'if you

    don't get down from the top of that ladder by the

    time i count to three, then woe betide you '!

    there is tension there .. a bit like in your taut

    elastic,

    ..you need huge amounts of confidence

    just in case they call your bluff ...

    where on earth do you go next, if they

    triumphantly do the logic,

    and realise they have boxed you into a corner?

    its not much fun if the elastic snaps.

    yes,

    in my opinion, this warrior deserves the extra

    notches.



    and thank you.

    it is lovely to see so much positive activity

    surrounding your family,

    bringing you such happiness.

    j



    | Posted on 2009-03-30 00:00:00 | by Alter idem | [ Reply to This ]
      And...Three strikes you're out?
    Beautiful Piece Mummy.
    | Posted on 2009-03-28 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      that's 'blazing hot'

    you missed the t in 'stretched'

    I think the imagery is outstanding and having encountered the numbers(and journal) before, I got this.

    I love that there's a brief seeming moment of tenderness in there and imagine there are meanings hiding under lichen that are being expressed/understood.

    you could carry this poem somewhere you might need it and be well armed.

    DB
    | Posted on 2009-03-27 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]


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