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Author: Old
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Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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As awkward as it seems
it's as if i have awoken
from a nightmarish dream.

Devils cried and tongues were spoken,
but the blood everywhere was cleaned.
Things with idle limbs kept chokin'
on the pleasures that they fiend.

No longer must things die
at the end of soiled hands.
I am satisfied.

Walking the graveyard of soiled plans
to reveal everything lost and blind
which shall find themselves in foreign lands
and I shall leave them followable signs.

No longer must things die.
I am satisfied.

Submitted on 2009-03-27 23:25:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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