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    dots Submission Name: What would you do?dots
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    Author: Plegias
    ASL Info:    17/ male/ my house
    Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 37/23/40
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
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    dotsWhat would you do?dots
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    What would you do,
    If I were to say to you,
    That I flew high
    Up in the sky?

    What would you do,
    If I were to say to you,
    That I see light
    Every single night?

    What would you do,
    If I were to say to you,
    That I wanted to be
    Having fun in the sea?

    What would you do,
    If I could take you,
    Beyond the skies
    Away from human lies?

    What would you do,
    If I could take you,
    To see that light
    I see to heighten your delight?

    What would you do,
    If I could take you,
    Beyond World's end
    To spend with a friend?

    Would you leave?
    Would you stay?
    Would you believe
    Or would you look away?

    Would you come with me?
    Would you stay here?
    Would you change your mind
    And draw me near?

    I promise you this,
    These will come true,
    But the Question remains:
    What would you do?




    Submitted on 2009-03-27 23:48:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I enjoyed reading this The poetic vibe is most defiantly, there. And your rhymes are catchy and easy to rmember and play back in your head like a tape recorder.

    I think my favorite line was:

    What would you do,
    If I could take you,
    Beyond the skies
    Away from human lies?

    It seemed to have more meaning than the rest to me. The words jointed together better, making me read it twice to actually get what you were talking about.

    I'm curious to know what was on your mind, when you wrote this piece, most likely alot of questions

    ~Very Nice~

    -Spaz, Earths Last Hope-
    | Posted on 2009-07-13 00:00:00 | by clarywhite wolf | [ Reply to This ]


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