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    dots Submission Name: Changedots
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    Author: rsujith
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 67/25/9
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 595
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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    Description:
       This poem is about bringing about a change in yourself for the sake of your friends. It is about the end result of changing for your friends and the satisfactiuon it gives.


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    Green, ugly and very wriggly,
    The unabated supreme ruler
    Of his small, leafy world
    Has heart filled with delight
    And worry kept a stranger.

    Ever blinded by excitement,
    Munching his loved leaves,
    Living life at a leisure pace.
    He loves his entire green world,
    But wasnít always loved back.


    When open eyes stare into a mirror,
    His own flaws unveiled,
    And so made up his mind,
    To change for his loved world,
    To change for his own sake.


    Rough roads met tough feet,
    Pain seared, but will soared.
    Withdrawn into an ugly cocoon,
    Set to win back lost hearts
    And proud to struggle en route.


    Light shone at the tunnelís end;
    Sweet fruits beyond withering flowers.
    The unabated ruler reinstated,
    Eternal happiness now back home.
    Out of a cocoon arises a beautiful moth!

    R.Sujith




    Submitted on 2009-03-28 07:24:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the idea brilliant! the words poignant just got lost a bit in middle probs me. Original and thought provoking
    ta miggy
    | Posted on 2009-04-27 00:00:00 | by miggy | [ Reply to This ]
      Again, very original in its concept. A really good piece of work you have here.

    Well done.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2009-04-22 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, that was really nice. I like the story line of that piece. Really good work. I can't wait to see more of your work . Keep writing :)
    | Posted on 2009-04-03 00:00:00 | by simpleandgreen | [ Reply to This ]
      well written, your theme is excellent , i feel that " withdrawn into an ugly cocoon", it shows a side of a personal mood. great poem. checkout my poems
    | Posted on 2009-03-28 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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