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    dots Submission Name: Heatdots
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    Author: taintedsmiles
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 64/90/75
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 682
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    Description:
       I't about two people falling in love...and not just having sex...making love and creating a baby in the moment of heat


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    dotsHeatdots
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    She is down,
    holding tight.
    Gripping the skin...
    Hot breathing,
    her passion,
    lay down and give in.

    He is solid,
    in stance.
    Hand sight looking:
    Keen.
    He straddles, and graples.
    Growing to give in.

    His skin and,
    her,
    skin.
    Lightly touching a breeze.
    Lips against lips,
    head drowning:
    in dream.
    Melt her,
    like butter...
    Fulfill his,
    fantasy.

    Heat from the hearts,
    pumping at speed.
    And for just,
    one,
    instance...
    A simple momment,
    in time...
    They pause...

    pump together...

    and beat as one,
    on the inside.

    Sensations wave through,
    Him and her,
    her,
    and him.
    Inside her,
    she's growing.
    unknowing;
    Whisper,
    hot breath.




    Submitted on 2009-03-28 14:27:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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