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Broken friendship

Author: sparkleshine
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Words: 326
Class/Type: Poetry /Friendship
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about bein left behind by someone that means alot to u

Broken friendship

Our friendship looked so joyful
now it appears doubtful
it upsets you when you see me with your friends
it upsets me when I see you with my friends
But now I see the truth

I now know that you were never my friend
You just acted like it
so you could use me
Now I am afraid to open up to a guy like that again
I am afraid to get backstabbed again

I do not want to go through the pain again
I have not recovered from you
It angers me when I think of how much I trusted you
I can not get my friends to see the truth about you
For I do not want them to go through this pain to

It is almost unbearable
But I know one day you will get your pay back
By far you are the hardest friend to let go so far
I hope that if you come back too me
I will have the strength to say ' no' to you

Because I do not want to be hurt again
It amazes me how I felt so close to you in only one year
I learned so much about you and you about me
This is one thing that is going to take a while to put in the past

It is painful to look at you if only for two seconds
Because I want to run up to you and hug you
To talk to you
To tell you that everything is going to be okay
For you to forgive me
and me to forgive you

Because I trully do miss you
You are always on my mind no matter what time
I want to make up for everything
We were as close as two friends could be without going out
But then you fell in love and left me behind

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  This really speaks to me it is a very emotional and realistic poem and I think that a lot of people could relate to this poem in some way and it can also make people open their eyes to realise they may lose someone they care for.
However there is a few grammatical errors such as 'backstabbed again'.
But overall the poem is vey good.

| Posted on 2009-06-30 00:00:00 | by PhoenixHope | [ Reply to This ]
  I am afraid to get backstabbed again
_mayb u should say stabbed in the back insted_

By far you are the hardest friend to let go so far
_idk if u ment to be the far at the end or not but it kinda messes the flow up a lil mayb u should take it out_

other then that i dont think i saw anythin wrong with it. i liked the topic and u really expressed ur feelings well. this was verey well writen.. keep up the good work

| Posted on 2009-04-10 00:00:00 | by SickOfHurting U | [ Reply to This ]

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