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    dots Submission Name: Broken friendshipdots
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    Author: sparkleshine
    Elite Ratio:    0.86 - 27/19/13
    Words: 326
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 691
    Average Vote:    2.0000
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    Description:
       about bein left behind by someone that means alot to u


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    dotsBroken friendshipdots
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    Our friendship looked so joyful
    now it appears doubtful
    it upsets you when you see me with your friends
    it upsets me when I see you with my friends
    But now I see the truth

    I now know that you were never my friend
    You just acted like it
    so you could use me
    Now I am afraid to open up to a guy like that again
    I am afraid to get backstabbed again

    I do not want to go through the pain again
    I have not recovered from you
    It angers me when I think of how much I trusted you
    I can not get my friends to see the truth about you
    For I do not want them to go through this pain to

    It is almost unbearable
    But I know one day you will get your pay back
    By far you are the hardest friend to let go so far
    I hope that if you come back too me
    I will have the strength to say ' no' to you

    Because I do not want to be hurt again
    It amazes me how I felt so close to you in only one year
    I learned so much about you and you about me
    This is one thing that is going to take a while to put in the past

    It is painful to look at you if only for two seconds
    Because I want to run up to you and hug you
    To talk to you
    To tell you that everything is going to be okay
    For you to forgive me
    and me to forgive you

    Because I trully do miss you
    You are always on my mind no matter what time
    I want to make up for everything
    We were as close as two friends could be without going out
    But then you fell in love and left me behind




    Submitted on 2009-03-28 20:25:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This really speaks to me it is a very emotional and realistic poem and I think that a lot of people could relate to this poem in some way and it can also make people open their eyes to realise they may lose someone they care for.
    However there is a few grammatical errors such as 'backstabbed again'.
    But overall the poem is vey good.

    Emma
    | Posted on 2009-06-30 00:00:00 | by PhoenixHope | [ Reply to This ]
      I am afraid to get backstabbed again
    _mayb u should say stabbed in the back insted_


    By far you are the hardest friend to let go so far
    _idk if u ment to be the far at the end or not but it kinda messes the flow up a lil mayb u should take it out_

    other then that i dont think i saw anythin wrong with it. i liked the topic and u really expressed ur feelings well. this was verey well writen.. keep up the good work

    _tayla_
    | Posted on 2009-04-10 00:00:00 | by SickOfHurting U | [ Reply to This ]


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