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jealousy


Author: brokenmirror
ASL Info:    150/f/duiuwy89
Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 46 /71 /29
Words: 42
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Description:




jealousy



why does jealousy
control?
so binding,
unforgiving.

why is it so hard
to forget?
it's somewhat telling
the things you can't let go

the things you never knew
that haunt your consciousness

the mind games
that manipulate
everything.




Submitted on 2009-03-29 21:08:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  You should put more emotion into this poem.
it's good at describing jelaousy, but that's it, just good.

i think you should compare, make imagery, put sensuality into it.
make it more appealing to the mind.

but you have a good start. Good potential. =]]]
| Posted on 2009-03-30 00:00:00 | by Sonson888 | [ Reply to This ]


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