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    dots Submission Name: When I Close my Heartdots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsWhen I Close my Heartdots
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    When I close my heart
    I think of my time spent with you
    I can feel it crying out
    Wanting what is long overdue

    It scratches at my chest
    To draw my attention
    It reminds me of good times
    Too many to mention

    Sometimes it feels wrong
    Sealing my heart away
    So I don't think about it
    My emotions kept at bay

    And maybe I feel dead
    It's better than dying at least
    Love beats numb beats pain
    Yet numb has little release

    All I can really do
    Is close my eyes
    One foot in front of the other
    And sacrifice

    But my feet now do all the leading
    My heart is shut out of it all
    Maybe one day they'll lead to
    Where there's no room left to fall

    But until then, when I close my heart
    I think of you




    Submitted on 2009-03-30 00:44:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked the flow to this poem alot, there are very few people out there that can rhyme without it seeming forced, and i believ u are in that catergory. Eyes and sacrifice has got to be the best rhyming pair i've seen in a long time ^_^

    Great job
    Cry
    | Posted on 2009-03-31 00:00:00 | by WhY-dO-yOu-CrY | [ Reply to This ]


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