I'm sorry to be picky, but check your spelling.
It's well written, it stirs the imagination and that's what every writters aim should primarily be.
Don't hesitate to play about with the timing. Not all pieces need to be under strict time, especially pieces that portray a strong emotion. Holding the stanzas tightly together defeats the purpose of expressing the magnitude of what you're feeling.
That's not to say that I don't like, I definitely do.
The last stanza is my favourite.
Again, check spelling and grammar, but overall it's an emotive piece.