i like poems with oceans in it - they have this strange effect of calmness even though the subject of the poem itself is sadness. i don't think this is stangnated at all and i like the metaphors. nice one.
The flow of this piece is stagnated. I really don't know what I can suggest. I really really love the third stanza. I also like the sixth stanza. The rest don't seem to be meaty enough. I think this piece has potential. ps Welcome to the site :)