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    dots Submission Name: A beautiful Eveningdots

    Author: moaxcym
    ASL Info:    23/m/Pakistan
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 155/196/85
    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dotsA beautiful Eveningdots

    The clouds like intoxicated djinns
    Float around the smoldering contours of the last autumn sun
    As the birds fly low upon the golden and silver linings
    that embellish the veil of God.
    The wind is pregnant with a serenade,
    Summoning all the unburied spring memories.

    It is a beautiful evening in Lahore.

    Submitted on 2009-03-30 12:57:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very eloquent and beautiful but short but nevertheless a very fine piece.
    | Posted on 2009-03-31 00:00:00 | by Doublefeather | [ Reply to This ]
      very beautiful , spiritual , brings the best in poetry , open atmosphere to life , great poem , checout my poetry and give me a comment
    | Posted on 2009-03-31 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]

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