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Destructible Me

Author: Maranne
ASL Info:    17/PA
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Words: 143
Class/Type: Poetry /Venting
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This is a poem I had to write as an assignment for my Creative Writing class. The assignment was, "Artful Lying."

Destructible Me

The world—
as we know it,
will end;
I’ll be the cause of it all.
The skies will rip open,
and fire will burn the sky;
all because I said I was

“No daughter of mine will
disgrace this family.”

Thoughts of mine
all impure,
My thoughts are known
Maybe, just maybe
I’m better off dead?
If I didn’t see that
face, the devil,
in the flesh;
I wouldn’t be a freak.

“…the lamb who strayed
away from the flock.”

My boyfriend left,
screaming words
of fury,

“You betrayed me,
You sicken me.”

This is one lie
that cannot be undone.

Maybe I should have
Maybe I should have
been more holy?
Where is my god now?
He left me to rot.
What would Jesus do?
I’ve been forgotten.

Submitted on 2009-03-30 13:27:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  no you have not been forgotten, there is anger in this poem , life can change a person , but don't give up , believe in the word of God , find a better understanding , things may seem dim at first , but the light will be bright. good poem , try a positive poem next
| Posted on 2009-03-30 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]

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