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    dots Submission Name: never see that this is medots
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    Author: scardnscared
    ASL Info:    20
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 339/412/258
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 59
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    dotsnever see that this is medots
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    they can look into those eyes
    and never see
    the pain you caused when you left me
    the way i laid shattered on the floor
    as you watched me through the broken door.
    they can hear the sounds
    and never know
    the way i screamed
    was like nails on the chalk board
    or the broken sobs made you kill me more.
    you screamed breakdown
    get back up and fight
    you screamed get out
    but come back when its light.
    the words and the noises
    were so confusing
    that i burned all my bridges
    and forgot all i knew.
    only heaven knew
    that we didnt have that far to fall
    and the devil wished for only rain.
    how do we save ourselves
    when we both hide inside these shells?
    so heres to you and heres to me
    hopefully the pain will win
    hopefully we'll die together in the fire
    make it last one more night
    make the pleasure take us higher.
    they can all look into those black holes you call eyes
    and never see
    that this is me.




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