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    dots Submission Name: Blurb 1 Escape!dots

    Author: MaxHam
    ASL Info:    20/m/NH USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 60/131/105
    Words: 455
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
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       Here is the first blurb, exciting right? Comments questions suggestions? Just comment...

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    dotsBlurb 1 Escape!dots

    Blades and Chris ran down to the entrance of the building but Sonya had strayed away from them on the way and was no where in sight.

    "Where's Sonya!?" Blades asked Chris worried as the few remaining Acid soldiers began running down firing their weapons. As they looked around they heard a strange rumbling noise that shook the entire building.

    "What now!?" Chris said as he could barely stay on his feet and Blades had to grab on to him to stay standing. A bulldozer then crashed into the building with Sonya driving.

    "Sonya!" They said as they ran over to the bulldozer, got in and drove right out onto the street and then onto route Interstate 95 towards Pennsylvania.

    "How did you get this?" Chris asked.

    "Lucky for us there was a construction site right across the street from the building." Minutes after entering the highway, tons of Acid squad cars chased after them and a Box News crew chased them. Each time of the police cars went to pass Sonya on either side, she swerved and rammed them off the road. The by standers on the highway pulled over noticing the police lights flashing and the sirens roaring. It was a couple hours before she made it to Pennsylvania and once she did the police of New York had to stop.

    "And the renegade terrorist leader, Sonya Roseline, has sped into Pennsylvania with a stolen bulldozer, officials at this time do not know what will happen to her but the police from New York City could do no more. It is now up to the Pennsylvania police to pick it up from there. This villainess of terrorism may finally be put to her end tonight!" Betty Stefanos said as a narration over a sky view of the chase playing on all T.Vs in the New York and Pennsylvania area.

    "Oh my goodness!" An old lady said watching the news in her rocking chair. "I hope that terrible girl goes to jail for a very long time!" Sonya turned down an exit ramp and she had to slam on the brakes to avoid hitting what looked like a large metal boulder. The bulldozer quickly turned to the side making an ear piercing screeching noise. The ball of metal then began molding itself into a large humanoid. Once it was fully functional it fired a rocket at the bulldozer.

    "Get out!" Sonya screamed as she and her renegades jumped out of the bulldozer and ran away before it exploded.

    "Garfield will destroy target with one-hundred percent accuracy!" It said with a robotic voice.

    "Obviously this is Jack's invention!" Sonya said getting ready to fight.

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