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    dots Submission Name: Flying With My Lovedots
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    Author: PhantomRose
    ASL Info:    19/F/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 43/58/35
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 532
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1050



    Description:
       More like a wish really. I don't have anyone like this, but hey, a girl can hope right?


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    dotsFlying With My Lovedots
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    Love hath no shame
    And hell hath no fury
    So don't worry about me, dear
    There's no need to hurry
    Just take my hand, love
    Let's fly away
    You're in my arms now
    And that's where you'll stay
    We'll soar over the clouds
    And across the moon
    We'll leave civilization behind,
    We'll reach the ocean soon
    Then we'll swim with the fishes
    Under the sea
    Alongside the sharks
    All happy and free
    Down to the abyss
    Where the glowing fish dwell
    Together we'll swim
    And life will be swell
    No more sorrow
    And no more hate
    We'll live forever happy
    We'll even stay up late
    That will be the perfect end
    To our perfect day
    So lay you down with me, dear
    I've got one thing left to say:
    "I love you, babe,
    With all my heart,
    And nothing in the world
    Could ever keep us apart."




    Submitted on 2009-03-30 20:54:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Aww this was so sweet and written very well.
    It's too bad you don't have anyone to give this to. It really is a wonderful feeling, unrealistic as it is. lol Oh well you'll fid your one and only some day.
    Keep up the awesome work!

    Bohne
    | Posted on 2009-04-01 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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