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    dots Submission Name: Judgement Nightdots
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    Author: PhantomRose
    ASL Info:    19/F/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 43/58/35
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsJudgement Nightdots
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    When the sun goes out and your warmth starts fading
    When the moon grows dim and the stars stop shining
    When you're out in the cold with no one left to hold,
    I hope you know...
    When the sun goes out I'll be your light
    When your warmth starts fading I'll hold you tight
    When the moon grows dim pray it gets brighter
    And when the stars stop shining I'll hold you tighter




    Submitted on 2009-03-30 20:59:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is simple, yet simply good...

    nicely written, the sentiment is strong and the wording is just enough...

    sometimes we wish others would trust us enough to lean on us...to let us be there for them...but often there is not enough trust in the world...or a friend or lover feels he or she does not want to burden us with things...yet...that is exactly what we want...to be able to be there for them...

    i like this muchly.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-05-11 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow that made me want to cry it was so beautiful and I'm speechless
    Keep up the fantastic work and I'll keep reading

    Bohne
    | Posted on 2009-04-01 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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