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I've Tryed and Tryed


Author: PhantomRose
ASL Info:    19/F/Illinois
Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 43 /58 /35
Words: 94
Class/Type: Poetry /I hate you
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Average Vote:    5.0000
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Not the best thing I've written, it's not even very recent, but I figured I'd throw it on here =]


I've Tryed and Tryed



I've tryed and tryed to kill and lie
I've tryed and tryed to make you die
I've tryed and tryed to make you love me
And yet you still kick and shove me
I've tryed and tryed to make you smile
But you've hurt and hated me all the while.
But no matter what I try or say
I know there is another day;
Another day to make you die
Another day to make you love me
And another day to make you smile
Because I know it's worth it all the while.




Submitted on 2009-03-30 21:05:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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