I've Tryed and Tryed

Author: PhantomRose ASL Info:    19/F/Illinois Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 43 /58 /35 Words: 94

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I've Tryed and Tryed

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I've tryed and tryed to kill and lie I've tryed and tryed to make you die I've tryed and tryed to make you love me And yet you still kick and shove me I've tryed and tryed to make you smile But you've hurt and hated me all the while. But no matter what I try or say I know there is another day; Another day to make you die Another day to make you love me And another day to make you smile Because I know it's worth it all the while.

Submitted on 2009-03-30 21:05:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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