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    dots Submission Name: I've Tryed and Tryeddots
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    Author: PhantomRose
    ASL Info:    19/F/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 43/58/35
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/I hate you
    Total Views: 656
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 547



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       Not the best thing I've written, it's not even very recent, but I figured I'd throw it on here =]


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    I've tryed and tryed to kill and lie
    I've tryed and tryed to make you die
    I've tryed and tryed to make you love me
    And yet you still kick and shove me
    I've tryed and tryed to make you smile
    But you've hurt and hated me all the while.
    But no matter what I try or say
    I know there is another day;
    Another day to make you die
    Another day to make you love me
    And another day to make you smile
    Because I know it's worth it all the while.




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