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Author: meoww
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tiny font, i know.
so shoot me.

And if

Submitted on 2009-03-30 21:59:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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| Posted on 2009-10-29 00:00:00 | by Maverique | [ Reply to This ]
  i loved this one!
| Posted on 2009-04-11 00:00:00 | by blackbird | [ Reply to This ]
  Jase is that you???

| Posted on 2009-03-31 00:00:00 | by annie0888 | [ Reply to This ]
  CTRL + and that should zoom in on the page, CTRL - zoom out, and CTRL 0 back to default settings. hehehe
| Posted on 2009-03-31 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]
  from a distance, with the brain fitting in the missing pieces, this looks like s america or a very thin africa,
and since sibliant fricatives are most common in the khoisan languages of africa, i was momentarily distracted.

i think however, that you have been just giving your words more space to show them to best effect.

it was worth reading them. actually i would have delighted in them even if you had not arranged them this way.
( perhaps it was a determined effort on your part to eliminate meanderings from myopic old biddies)

fortunately my eyesight at this distance is fine thank you(!)
and i am with Daniel on this one, in that it does sound lovely if you read it without dwelling on it too deeply.

i think many of us have those glossed over weekends and some too, hear those dischordant instruments in our heads from time to time. i have too many of those 'if only' moments ..should any be bliss? on reflection, probably not.

do your roadies make 'sibliance checks' these days?
| Posted on 2009-03-31 00:00:00 | by Alter idem | [ Reply to This ]
  I don't think I'll squint too long at this.

I think I know it already,

but did not put it half so well.

It has the harmony of disjointedness,

it has the ring of lovely sound--

and it is.
| Posted on 2009-03-30 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]

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