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    dots Submission Name: The Jewel Boxdots

    Author: realpoet
    Elite Ratio:    6.51 - 904/475/311
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    dotsThe Jewel Boxdots

    No one ever really grows up
    just bit by bit as time goes on
    joining ranks with those thoughted grown
    offering empty coffee cup
    to you as eager hungry pup
    eager to follow not your own
    with sense of being not alone,
    never ever really grown up.

    As time will swing its way around
    and haunt you to your very soul
    when you thought you walked safer ground,
    harbouring that which you'd not found,
    memories dream those days of old
    reminding you life has its toll.

    Submitted on 2009-03-31 10:58:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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