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    dots Submission Name: Following A Broken Roaddots
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    Author: Texan_Poet
    ASL Info:    20/F/daydreaming
    Elite Ratio:    5.7 - 127/123/48
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
    Total Views: 493
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       I'm not sure about a title, any suggestions? I wrote this (like most of mine) when I was supposed to be taking math notes (boo, hiss). Anyway, it was just a random thought that came into my head. I thought of the first stanza and wrote it down and the rest just kind of... happened.

    Lady Rose

    EDIT
    I decided on the title "Following A Broken Road" because that's what this poem represents. The feeling of being pulled in two directions, polar to each other. One cynical, one trusting. One smothering all emotion, one encouraging it, ect. The road you follow, in your mind, and the choices you make depend on which side of your personality is dominate at that moment. Many people don't understand that, so they will often only see one part of someones personality, but will think they know all of that person, when in truth they only see a small part.


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    dotsFollowing A Broken Roaddots
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    Hold your breath
    And take a dare,
    Dive off the cliff
    To see if they care.

    Take your dreams in hand
    And hold them to your past.
    Show your true self,
    And give them a scare.

    Morbid facinations,
    Cynical beliefs.
    But innocent dreams,
    How?

    Makes no sense,
    But that it's who you are.
    Psychotic? Yes, it is.
    But it's the truth.

    Break the mold into a thousand pieces,
    And don't surrender yourself,
    Never give in and change who you are,
    Show them only part,
    And let them think they understand.




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      like the title chioce. it woorks very well
    | Posted on 2009-04-01 00:00:00 | by Sepheroth432 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmmm.... I think "Destroy Your Conformity", maybe something like, "Following No Crowds", or maybe "Lead Your Own Life"... I'm not sure I cant really think and those are the best I can come up with at this very moment.

    If you like them cool if not still cool

    Your friend
    Justin
    | Posted on 2009-04-01 00:00:00 | by Sepheroth432 | [ Reply to This ]
      How about... The Innocence Within? No, that's pretty bad. I'm just as bad at titles so don't listen to me :) I generally write during maths as well, my best stuff comes from my thoughts wandering during lectures and exams.

    I don't think I need to tell you that I can really relate to your work. As usual I love it and it's softly tugging at my heart at the same time.

    Yours always,
    Iffy
    | Posted on 2009-04-01 00:00:00 | by Iffy | [ Reply to This ]


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