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    dots Submission Name: my first lossdots
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    Author: bleedingxxheart
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    dotsmy first lossdots
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    i wonder what went wrong
    neither of us know
    i sit here in your arms
    unwilling to let go

    i know we had our share
    of memories good and bad
    although we always fought
    neither of us could stay mad

    but this time was different
    this fight wasn't going to end
    i never thought you would leave me
    with this heart no one can mend

    the hardest thing about this
    was forcing myself to let go
    i had to pull away
    i couldn't let my feelings show

    moving on is hard
    but time will heal the pain
    although it seems unbearable
    i will not suffer in vain.




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      this is a nice description of letting go but most
    would be angry but this shows a lot of maturity on your part be well and stay strong
    | Posted on 2009-04-02 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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