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    dots Submission Name: Painter of Lifedots
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    Author: Draigon
    ASL Info:    25/m/Al
    Elite Ratio:    4.25 - 164/196/91
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsPainter of Lifedots
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    Shed a tear for the lost
    condemed heart,
    torn apart,
    painting a beautiful
    work of art.

    Wallow in sin
    become born again,
    just to be cast out
    to live with doubt.

    Poetic dreams,
    always falls
    the way the painter deems.

    The painter's brush
    is in what we trust,
    but it decieves
    and stresses
    what is said to be relieved.

    Cast a stone,
    shatter the past,
    because surely it's gone.
    Nothing ever lasts...




    Submitted on 2009-04-01 02:20:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i agree with blu except i thought that the painter symbolizes one's control or inability to control the future hence we trust in ourselves yet ironically we cannot decide our fate for it is us who in the end deceive ourselves.

    the overall tone of the poem is nice though. good read.

    cheers!
    Kat
    | Posted on 2011-09-05 00:00:00 | by moonlitsky | [ Reply to This ]
      This sounds so melancholy. A beautiful beat up and down beat to this piece. The painter's brush sounds sort of symbolic of a higher power/omniscent force.
    the second line of the first stanza does seem a little disconnected from the surrounding lines though.

    c.blu
    | Posted on 2009-04-03 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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