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    dots Submission Name: My Disasterdots
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    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.54 - 101/55/50
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       These words just kind fell into my head but some of them were motivated by some who always look up to me or always needing me to give them a hand and being that theres so many friends. I get so cought in it that i forget my self.


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    dotsMy Disasterdots
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    All the walls around me begin to fall
    Screaming out, some one please here this call
    Yet Iím the one to find every one else
    Just because they canít really find themselves
    Leave before me the image in the mirror
    I wish my shadow would just disappear
    Becoming fragile I fall and fail
    On this path of beseech and betrayal

    Tripping over themselves they start to shout
    Tumbling over each other they reach out
    But like a pillar in a disaster
    I crumble from all the this pressure
    Thrown into nightmares surrounded by crime
    Iím lost into this hour glass of time
    With no one around to lend me a hand
    I drift away into pieces of sand




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      Even though these words just fell in your head, they look great on paper. It almost sounds like there's a war and you go back to save everyone else, but end up killing yourself in the process. I actually feel like this sometimes with my friends. They ask my opinion thinking that I know what to do. Sometimes it's just too much. But if you ever have a problem you want to discus, always know that someones there for you ok. I don't mind one more friend. :)
    ~Rachelle
    | Posted on 2009-04-08 00:00:00 | by Priestess | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Faid.... but in the end, you are left only with yourself, there is more strength in the solitary figure who stands before the storm, than there is in those who hide behind it. Thank you so much for your comment on Dead Roses
    | Posted on 2009-04-03 00:00:00 | by col13x | [ Reply to This ]


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