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Nothing To Do

Author: bubble_popper15
ASL Info:    17, f, confused
Elite Ratio:    4.13 - 201 /127 /45
Words: 93
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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About the man I love <3

Nothing To Do

I sit in class
With nothing to do
As the time begins to pass
I start thinking of you...

Thinking of your face
How wonderful it is
I wish you were in this place
When you're not around, it's your face I miss

I love you more than life itself
I would do anything for you
My heart was on a shelf
But the fear is through

With you, the real me shines
I have nothing to hide
We get closer with time
One day I will be your bride.

Submitted on 2009-04-01 14:18:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is not too bad for having nothing to do. Perhaps you could just go directly into describing what you are thinking about without telling the reader in the second stanza that is what ou are doing. I think it would read better that way.

Just a thought.

The Gadfly
| Posted on 2009-04-02 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]

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