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    dots Submission Name: Wrong is rightdots

    Author: PiperH
    ASL Info:    17, F, Georgia
    Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 253/299/172
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       I've seen up close how hard it can be to be unaccepted by people you love just because of the person you are.
    If you love someone with all your heart, it shouldn't matter what sex you both are. All that should matter is what is right, and what is wrong. Right being that you are in love, and wrong being that you hide your feelings from other people just because you feel guilty for feeling the way you do.
    We should accept everyone!
    So, i wrote this poem to make my point.
    and i hope no one bashes me for this.... If you don't like it, don't comment please.

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    dotsWrong is rightdots

    Her body freezes from the cold
    Feelings become too slippery to hold
    as she stands, feet planted on the floor
    her heart beats faster than ever before
    she told you once, she told you twice
    about the way her heart was sliced
    she wanted to be right, but wrong felt good
    she fell in love never knowing she could
    but fire will burn, and people will hate
    and god in heaven won't open his gate
    if she does not marry the big strong man
    instead of the woman who holds her heart in her hands....

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