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    dots Submission Name: The Breakdots

    Author: Morsketch
    ASL Info:    21/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 27/26/26
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       One of my attacks

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    dotsThe Breakdots

    Nervous impulse

    Nothing’s right…

    Too much clutter,
    In my mind….

    Too much touching
    To my skin,
    Itching, crawling,
    Never ends;

    Little things,
    Come trickling in,
    Over my
    Uncovered skin-
    Driving mind
    To wind up tight
    Snapping tremors
    Of my might--Panic building,
    In my skin,
    Something’s coming,
    Cardinal sin…
    Two steps one step
    Count to thirty,
    Scrub your hands, They can’t be dirty -- Thrashing muscles, Thudding heart, Crashing brain waves, Just the start…

    Submitted on 2009-04-01 19:39:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very well described. I itched then got the willies. I hope you don't really feel this way. If so God bless! Also, thank you for sharing the attack.

    | Posted on 2009-04-01 00:00:00 | by Kuuipo | [ Reply to This ]

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