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    dots Submission Name: When You Get Close To Me dots
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    Author: realpoet
    Elite Ratio:    6.51 - 904/475/311
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 532
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Here I go again writing a song to the love of my life.


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    dotsWhen You Get Close To Me dots
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    (chorus)
    you-oo-oo-oo-oo-u
    roll me over, roll me over,
    everytime you say I love you-oo-oo-ooo-u.
    Baby, you roll me over
    everytime I'm with you-oo-oo-oo-u.
    (verse)
    Your voice, your walk, the way you talk
    is the right kind of pillow talk.
    Your lips, so sweet, your choice of color,neat,
    is the right kind of treat
    that rolls me over, rolls me over,
    when you get close to me.
    (chorus)

    (verse)
    Your swiggle,your wiggle, the way you jiggle,
    leaves me no room to fanaggle
    since you drive me crazy the way you giggle
    when your and my lips touch and sizzle,
    that's all it takes. You roll me over.
    (chorus)

    (verse)
    oo-oo-oo-oo--oo, la,la,lah,lah,ah,
    baby, you roll me over,
    roll me over, roll me over
    everytime I'm with you-oo-oo-oo-u,
    everytime I get close to you.
    (chorus)




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      a melody poem , joyous emotions , simple with a sweet blend , it has a love interest , great poem
    | Posted on 2009-04-02 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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