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    dots Submission Name: This is hardly a poem~dots

    Author: doppelganger
    ASL Info:    26/f/your brain
    Elite Ratio:    1.98 - 34/223/160
    Words: 326
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Yeah, don't take this seriously. I mean, the subject matter, yeah. I mean it all.
    It's just, I have terrible problems with successfully expressing myself when it comes to love, especially in a poetic manner. For some odd reason. o.O;;
    But I've been meaning to write something for my boyfriend, as I just want him to know completely how I feel. So I wrote this for him, and he's not that great at understanding poetry, so I think he'll get this one.

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    dotsThis is hardly a poem~dots

    Like a surgeon you opened me up
    And the tear that fell from your eye,
    When that mutinous speck of dust flew in,
    Shook hands with my blood flow
    And mended the wounds that had
    Been festering there for years.

    And like that surgeon, you sewed me shut
    With a needle of kindness and stitches of hope
    You held my hand when the gas wore off
    And I awoke to your satisfied smile.

    You made me whole again.

    And now, I swear, all I say is true
    That my heart only beats so it might
    Beat with yours when we are close.
    That I only breathe so that I might
    Remember how when your lips touch mine.
    That I only see so that I might
    Know what true love looks like.

    And it looks like you.

    You are the poem I could never write,
    Though somehow you exist in the
    Form of a living, breathing, human being.
    Though to me, youre more of an angel.
    The concert I could never see,
    The prophet I could never meet,
    The hope I could never find.
    Yet here you are, and you are mine.

    No words could express the joy
    I feel when my heart skips a beat
    From a simple moment passed with you.
    And no words could define the love
    I feel when I see you smile.
    Just knowing that somewhere, in that
    Happy person, a love resides,
    A love for me.

    And it feels like hope.

    If I could build a palace,
    Or pen an epic ballad,
    Perhaps paint a mural,
    And know youd understand.
    Id spend my whole life loving you,
    All the while, holding your hand.

    Id pass the chance for eternal fame,
    And a life chiseled in historys stone.
    Even if it meant I could explain,
    Id give it all up, for eternity with you.

    You are the only legend I need.

    Submitted on 2009-04-02 01:12:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is beautiful! I love the imagry of comparing him to a surgon, and I understand exactly how you feel. Overall, I think it came out pretty well, even if some of the word choices and phrasing are a bit odd o.O. No big deal though, And I say you just have to be a bit less hard on yourself.

    Lady Rose
    | Posted on 2009-04-03 00:00:00 | by Texan_Poet | [ Reply to This ]

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