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    dots Submission Name: A Very Grey Daydots

    Author: simpleandgreen
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 39/141/136
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 663
    Average Vote:    4.5000
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       I know all poems are a little bit depressing these days, but that's what makes them interesting. I wrote this peom when I was feeling quiet grey. That's all I have to say. So yeah...Good day! ;)

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    dotsA Very Grey Daydots

    Tis only the middle of May,
    Yet everything seems so solemly grey.

    The dancing water in the creeks,
    Suddenly fell down a couple of beats.

    The comforting sway of the palm trees,
    Didn't sway enough to please.

    There's an eerie mood in the air,
    Everything felt as dead as hair.

    The thick fog weighted us down,
    It started from the valley and made it's way to town.

    The bronze hair wiped across thy face,
    Giving cruel punishment instead of grace.

    The flourishing plants have withered away,
    And now I'm afraid it's safe to say,

    I'm not feeling well today,
    In fact, I might be feeling a little grey.

    Submitted on 2009-04-02 16:39:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very nice poem
    everything flows well together
    | Posted on 2009-04-06 00:00:00 | by Toosha | [ Reply to This ]
      a blossom poem , feel of spirit , sentimental , emotional comfort zone , unique , creative , great oem , keeping writing
    | Posted on 2009-04-03 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is very nice. the way you put in the water and the palm trees and the fog is good. i relate to it a lot, cause i think pretty much on the same lines. and its good to find somebody who thinks like you do.
    nice poem dude...
    | Posted on 2009-04-03 00:00:00 | by rsujith | [ Reply to This ]

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