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Relentless White Lines


Author: edthepoet
ASL Info:    47-m-Pa
Elite Ratio:    4.72 - 1476 /991 /125
Words: 114
Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
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Relentless White Lines



Relentless White Lines

Looking down upon where a body once laid

The chalky outline looks very familiar

Trying desperately to picture the space between the lines in 3D

Tears begin to seep

As the picture begin to appear

The white chalk line suddenly disappears

Leaving me wondering what is happening or has happened

Fear command the reality and possibly the unconscious mind

Filtering through the darkened bleakness to acquire the truth

Stumbling mindlessly and cautiously upon the advantage of self-observation

Am I witnessing from a heavenly view, a distressed dream

or praying it’s an anxiety attack that soon to fade





Submitted on 2009-04-02 22:12:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Oh wow... I'm SO happy to see you posting again... this will make me return to the site more often... that's for sure!

This poem makes me feel as if you were in an accident or are the victim of a crime... and they've put the white lines around you, depicting the body... seems almost surreal... as if it's not happening to you and you're viewing from outside...

Amazing word choice adding a poingnant, sorrowful feel to the piece.

Great write!
| Posted on 2009-04-03 00:00:00 | by Beulah | [ Reply to This ]


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