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    Author: Plegias
    ASL Info:    17/ male/ my house
    Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 37/23/40
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Yes, I know, I repeated some things. But honestly, how can people say these things, myself included, when they simply don't know even half of the story!


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    How can you say if something's rightious or not,
    Whenever those who are considered as such should not be sought?
    How can you say what is good and what is bad,
    When he who sets the morals, is evil and mad?
    How can you say if one is right or wrong,
    If they believe in God and a simple song?
    How can you say what is great or otherwise,
    When eveyone can think and stratigize?
    How can you say what the world is,
    When you have no clue what another's thinking is?
    How can you say that there's no hope left but a wall,
    When there is light deep down that none ever saw?
    How can you say these,
    And know none of the truth?
    These are lies,
    None holds any truth.




    Submitted on 2009-04-02 22:13:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the issues you address in this writing, but there's no solution presented. Its one thing to vent, another to write great poetry. Make it more personal, illustrate how these things affected you, how did these issues make you feel? Make it Personal.
    | Posted on 2009-04-03 00:00:00 | by Dorian Grey | [ Reply to This ]


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