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    dots Submission Name: Flavor of Addictiondots
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    Author: Toosha
    ASL Info:    18/f/SD
    Elite Ratio:    1.84 - 20/13/11
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 619
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 576



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    dotsFlavor of Addictiondots
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    Warmth around me
    Only when you're near
    Without you, I fear
    I will no longer continue to be

    Heart beat quickens
    My everything within your fingers
    Laying down, my body lingers
    When you're away, my body sickens

    Head full of cloud
    when I take in your sweet flavor
    Each moment with you I forever savor
    Makes me proud

    I tell you good-bye
    You depart with an uproar
    Leaving my whole being sore
    At this time, I sit and cry
    Wishing to die




    Submitted on 2009-04-03 02:44:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it alot. I love how you incourparate(sp?) your feelings in the poem.Your very talented and You should def. write more.The ending was my favorite.
    | Posted on 2009-04-29 00:00:00 | by rosealiehale | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it i really do
    you know you should put just a lil
    more of YOUR feelings in it
    it's you but make it MORE you
    if you get what i mean
    i aint trying to be a [censored]
    i aint so yeah it is good
    just a lil more you though
    kk
    loves Dommy
    | Posted on 2009-04-21 00:00:00 | by Rubesangel | [ Reply to This ]
      Hm. I kind of like it. It's not really what I'm used to reading, and seems a bit cliché. Haha. My poems are always really, really cliché. However, I like the message of the poem and you do an excellent job conveying your emotions in this piece. It's an interesting take.


    Thanks for the write. <3


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    | Posted on 2009-04-04 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]
      That was a really interesting poem. Umm not rlly sure what to say about. Don't get me wrong, it was good, but it was also very interesting.
    | Posted on 2009-04-03 00:00:00 | by simpleandgreen | [ Reply to This ]


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