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    dots Submission Name: HEAVENdots
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    Author: rsujith
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 67/25/9
    Words: 244
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    The day grows cooler,
    The light goes dim,
    Behold! The great clouded sky,
    That symbolizes the moment when
    The heaven, it is holding up in its arms,
    Is going to shower the mercy upon us,
    The sinful beings that shred the earth

    As the clouds crack open,
    The leaves look up, waiting
    For heaven to descend upon them.

    As the drop of water falls on a leaf,
    The tender leaf holds still for a divine moment,
    As if in surprise, that fate
    Had chosen it to bear
    The weight of heaven itself
    Before it bends down, and
    As the water slides down,
    It rewards the leaf with tiny droplets.

    And all that day the leaf shall
    Display the shining droplets of heaven
    That it was blessed with, and
    Beaming it would say, Ive been washed free of my sins

    The wet roads bear a foolish traveler running home
    Away from the messengers of heaven
    To keep his sins for himself.


    Deep runs the sinned river
    Through the low ravines and valleys
    And as the rain falls on the river
    Cleansing the river free of its sins,
    The pure river grows in happiness and pride
    Swells and floods the earth around it,
    And in its pride it again sins
    And harms the beings around.

    Of these three kinds are the people around you
    Whom do you choose to be?




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    ||| Comments |||
      Very descriptive and precise. I liked this one as well as the others. Great work. Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2009-09-22 00:00:00 | by extrEMO | [ Reply to This ]
      very interesting.
    | Posted on 2009-04-27 00:00:00 | by Vampiric Death | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree, the blend of this piece is refreshing and different.

    Very well written indeed.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2009-04-22 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice poem. I liked how it was different from serious and ranting poems. Like a breathe of fresh air. :) The way that you incorperated the nature and human nature at the same time was really interesting in a good way.
    | Posted on 2009-04-03 00:00:00 | by simpleandgreen | [ Reply to This ]


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