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    dots Submission Name: Founddots
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    Author: Beulah
    Elite Ratio:    4.78 - 588/414/44
    Words: 28
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 832
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 230



    Description:
       An ode to Bernhard and his search....


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    dotsFounddots
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    crazy, benevolent
    wish of my heart
    carry me away
    to wistfully drain
    empty promises
    from forgotten crevices
    of this barren soul
    expectantly holding
    my breath
    and a sigh




    Submitted on 2009-04-03 12:20:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think that this is a great start! A little editing would go a long way, though. the last line is irrevelant, because sighs are just exageratted audible breathing.

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    | Posted on 2009-04-03 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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