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    dots Submission Name: Predetermination of Loversdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 275
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsPredetermination of Loversdots

    Predetermination of Lovers

    Proactive on the lips of such sensual passions
    Scavenges through follicles design
    To written archangels of expression

    Such are the hungry beats and pulses that evolve
    In contemplation
    Of Amours encounter with her skin

    Countenance and coveted demonstrative
    Spills a wet lust fervent
    Fever pitched by the wisp succulence

    Clamorous and pounds its ranting quintessence of want
    Desirous burns, enflamed in whispers
    And craves never ending

    To lay upon the flower pillowed head
    And crush the blooms of reticence
    Till breathing cries in a desperate pant

    Such are the embers longings for her
    That there ignition turns to a mockery of fire
    And a mans soul can capture the essence of the sun

    Predetermination of the telling caress
    Holds the nudity of speechless inquiries of sighs

    Rampant palmistry of luxuria, grabs !
    A mouth-to-mouth pleading of sustenance
    On surging floods in beckoned waves, has !

    As this keel of heat rides in sweat
    Savoured on the incremental words of flesh
    Swims the boundless oceans of love

    Exhausted to the tasted need
    Divulged and disintegrated to unity
    Laboured to the inch, of the light, in her opening eyes

    Sees distant gasp, focused releases
    Breaks upon the spinal tidal arches
    A salutation vulnerable to the ravages of aphrodisia

    She devastates the tenderness in me
    To build a more touched hyper-intensity
    On the quivering ends of our fingertips

    Leaves the escaping whimpering to linger on sound
    Sleeping on the quiet unknown bed
    Of lovers

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