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    dots Submission Name: Virtual Suicidedots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsVirtual Suicidedots
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    Virtual Suicide

    And should I scratch the darkness
    For the sake of blood
    Flow sickly red abhorrent
    The succulence bewildered sticky heart

    Ravenous escape to shadow
    And mumble prays that have no answers
    Only gleams of hope
    That plea-bargain the sun to have risen

    Leave me scathing in my own dust

    Hiding in the corners where shadows depart
    Refusing even nightmares
    On the dull thump and thud
    Beating slow incarcerated seconds behind my eyes

    Fickle bones to draw the knife

    Contemplate the makings of suicide
    Black ink blood on the blank ink night
    Swallowed my pride
    And tossed the blade aside

    Chill shivered in beaded sweat
    Lest you forget, you forget, how close you came
    To the ending vent
    And the endless rant of an open vein

    Huddled on the rocking chair of my knees
    Plea-bargain the sun to rise
    Save me from the dread of tonight
    Swallow me whole for the sake of blood

    Virtual suicide










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