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    Author: wizardmaster
    ASL Info:    2314/girl/China
    Elite Ratio:    4.09 - 7/7/21
    Words: 239
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
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    Alisabeth awoke when she heard a sound at the door. Quickly she got dressed and grabbed her two samurai swords that her grandfather gave her only minutes before he died.
    When she walked into the sitting room, where her phoenix usually is, There were several police men, and Grangu no where to be found.
    The police then turned around. Startled one of them said,
    "Who are you? Why are you here?"
    Alisabeth simply answered, "You have no right to come into my house and ask me questions on my own property. Now out, I say, Out!" She tried to push the police out the door, but it didn't exactly work.
    "Now hold on little lady, You can't just push three officials out the door without an explanation. Now please, answer my friends questions." Alisabeth noticed that the one that spoke earlier was bald and fat. The one that spoke now, was the exact opposite.
    Tall, young and had his hair, along with an odd mustache.
    " Do not take this the wrong way, but with my rights, as a citizen over the age of 16, I do have the right to push three officials put of my house. Now on with you!" She paused, but then said softly, "You don't happen to know where my phoenix is, Do you?




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